how does this look on a CV? Is it OK for the intro part to be (very) job specific?

Question

"Seeking a challenging and rewarding position in mechanical engineering after graduating with a BEng Honours in Mechanical Design Engineering and 324 UCAS points. Keen to learn about mining technology and to develop and research new technologies and processes. Experience of using SolidEdge (3D CAD), FEA and Excel. Knowledge of Experimental Design and other statistical methods."

ps: I'm not applying to be a miner!

Answer 1

I'd leave out the UCAS points bit too, as it doesn't really "speak" to employers.



You could also re-hash the second sentence like this :



"Keen to develop further knowledge of mining technology and conduct research into new processes."



The "keen to learn" implies that you are inexperienced while "keen develop further knowledge" would suggest that you already have some understanding which you wish to build on.



Good luck with the application!

Answer 2

The first "sentence" is too long, Leave out challenging and rewarding. Say: "Seeking a position in mechanical engineering", Then list your job qualifications.

Answer 3

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Answer 4

I'd leave out the bit about UCAS points as you now have a degree.



Rather than "knowledge of", I'd use "experience" / "experienced in" / "practised in", or something similar, as "knowledge of" doesn't quantify how much knowledge you have.



List one or two statistical methods (drop in a few buzzwords).

Answer 5

I don't think that it sound nice. Well its looking more of a showman.

What is really needed is to provide a objective which shows what your vision is and what you can deliver and will produce for any employer who will be hiring you.

your first line looks good for half way but after that better to put that half in skills section.

Answer 6

Good Luck with Pampers suggestion BOB for and with your job application I'm sure your enthusiasm will reward you, greatly.

Answer 7

It's clear, concise and positive.

It always depends on the person who reads it but that looks good to me, and I've had to vet a lot of people in my time.

Answer 8

yeah that sounds cool but dont put this bit-

ps: I'm not applying to be a miner!

Answer 9

Stop showing off!